~~~just a ThoughT~

[*Bling*]

How long is it till we do what we preach//

wondering much of this world I can be reach //

people hate cause they know they cant teach/

but how can you look for what’s not there?

How can u feel bad when really you don’t care//

Walking down the street stab with a handful of stares//

Life is worst then a bad dream its always a worst night mare//

Thinking where are my riches and where is my love its not at all fair//

But this burden I can no longer bare//

Sic of tired of hearing to be always true to your self//

When this same people get buried in their own cooperate wealth///

Its worst then filth when poor people cant pay for their own health//

But am a leave a foot print in this street/

Ill be rocking beats every time I step with my feet//

but this fag gangster i see on TV want to go out shooting and leave innocent people choked//

Never every thinking about the wives and kids who’s now broke//

must be a ~hoke~ because all yah haters and muders wannt to do is ~provoke~

Thinking about it so hard but yet I still cant get the idea thought/

Now kids are killing kids don’t give a shit even if they get caught//
Reminds me of how raps heading down this cooperate drop….

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FINAL TOUGHT

looking at my pen thinking is this weapon with in?
can i kill more poeple and commit a thousand sins?
i heard a paper and ink change change a loos to a win//
but now i relize that the final though is till infin//
no matter how much you learn youll never know//
what the simplest man on this earth already shows....




* BAck ground* when i was about to drop this i read it though and had some more ideas which is the final thought part i add on ....... But there is no title to this its just wat u picture or learn from it so plez till me what you think and

~peace~

[*Bling*]

plez tell me what u think of this ...............
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~peace~

[*Bling*]

fuck come one and just peep this. I drop at your guys poem and stuff

~peacE~

[Varentao]

It did have that feel of quite real thoughts. Kind of fed up or reached a point where you've found the need to just let rip (though in a relatively controlled manner) what's on your mind. The questions which seem to have so many answers...yet also none at all. The situations which seem to have entrances and/or exits.

It did seem from the heart. Something that isn't meant to be anything but a personal blast. It seemed to go off onto hip-hop...though it did also seem to look at other things. Which i guess is what hip-hop does anyway. Er...

...resp...

[-->FreeBasE<--]

basic rhyme scheme but it was pretty deep

not too bad vocab and good emotion

change the structure you wrote though

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[Ace Of Spades]

^word to that...pretty simple drop...but it was nice still...i
could sorta feel sum of the things u were saying...so that
was nice...jus fix it up a little and add some complexity and
you'd do way better...propz
peace

[*Bling*]

thanks for the propz and for honest feed back. Once i get my adiuo up to noob stander lol a going to drop a song talking about the rap game and my life. And if it seem i wonder i bascailly did cuz i cant just speak on one topic.

hopefully itll sound/ make more sense when drop aiduo tho here is some more bits of the song am goign to drop

Answers seem to be far ~away~ waking up thinking what will happing ~today~ am never sure what to ~say~ so I ~pray~ that my heart will follow the ~way~ cause in the darkest mist all I see is you in the hall ~way~ am not broking ~down~ just un ~found ~

another bit..


How are my words supposed to reach the earths ~children~ then FUCK THIS RAP GAME only talks about ~killing~
yah i said Fuck it you know how you also ~Feel it~
every one knows but syas nothing am to ~real to it~

^^^^^^^^^ Am not going to transalte to you just tell me what u think of it its supposed to make u think..


~pEaCe~
don’t care if yah hate me or be ~feeling~