RW Wk1 - Virbius vs Unfukwitable *Virb Wins*

[Bag Mandela]

Ransom Writers Week 1 - Regular 6 Line Battle

6 lines each (doesn’t have to be set up-punch x3, you have creative freedom)

Bars due Tuesday 15th Oct
Public voting closes Wednesday 16th Oct

-Posting explanations / references below your bars is strongly recommended.
-State your accent in this first round then we’re good for the rest of the tourney.


2 impartial judges + public vote will decide the winner
MV’s vote = 1 vote
Bag's vote = 1 vote
Overall public vote = 1 vote
(Rebuttals, late drops & no shows are an instant loss)

@Virbius @Unfukwitable

[Virbius]

Check

[Unfukwitable]

Check

[Virbius]

I wanted a break from all the beef and politics and tryna be provocative so I came in thinking I might try to keep it positive coz you’re nice with the rhymes and your themes evocative, and
…Nah fuck that! since it’s starting with Un I must mean the opposite. Let’s go!
I’ll shiv this bitch in the ribs til his lungs tear and it’s unfair I’ll take Unf air and his firstborn too, I ain’t done there,
I’ll cook his flesh like a French chef taking some care, come share, we were bros so I’m gonna serve Unf rare (un frere).
Or it’s something similar just as sinister, I’ll punch this cunt til the lumps disfigure ya,
Gushing blood and viscera, then when his folks can’t identify his corpse, fuck, that’s Unf familia.


Explanations:
Starting with Un- first opp of the tournament. If you’ve got un at the start of a word then it means the opposite.
Said it’s unfair I’ll take Unf air and his firstborn too, so that’s Unf heir.
Serve Unf rare- unique beating, or serve his flesh rare, or ‘un frere’ meaning ‘a brother’ in French.
Unf familia- his folks, or unfamiliar (because he’s body’s mutilated beyond recognition).

Accent: Southwest England

[Unfukwitable]

This lying puss ain’t a beast, this bitch boutta be dying shook,
They thought Virb’ll alarm us til he sees a Half moon now he’s dying a crying wolf,
Ima break ya face and choke u til u fade away, beat u til u’re pale and make a tape,
The Video titled: “Fuk whippin this bitch til he’s 50 shades of grey”!,
I got meatgrinders to press u thru, Ima shoot you Then server you,
Once we see V, 8 Splash in his body ! Then we taking the corpse & blending the vegetable!





(EXPO)
Verbal Alarm(Crying Wolf = Half Moons)
If you seen 50 shades of grey u should get it
V8 splash is a juice and ima blend his body while he’s still a vegetable

[Jack Hallows]

Vote - Virbius

this was a hard battle for me to judge but one i definitely wanted to, regardless. took me about a half hour going over both verses carefully & i’m sure my decision is solid.

Virbius has a frustrating rhyme style. his six lines could easily stretch into 10 with how much content is crammed in one bar, but if read a certain way, it actually flows aight, just very syllabic. had to keep re-reading to get used to it as to not be biased against it. i still don’t like it, but it works. what i did like about the verse was that once i got the cadence of it down, it actually flowed pretty well. it was chaotic, very compressed & had a lot of internal connectivity that branched into the wider scheme. the concepts were well developed and some were easy to miss if not paying attention, like the brother/un frere line. i liked the wordplay of using unf repeatedly in various ways. particularly liked the unf air line & all the internal multis. solid verse, a bit cramped but very creative & had a couple tough lines to outdo. closer was dope.

Unfukwitable came solid as always. clean bars. easy to read. direct & to the point. i liked the 50 shades line. never saw the flick but i know it’s some bdsm white people shit. Virb’ll wordplay was cool, Unfwit does that well. the decider for me overall was the closer. i liked Unfwit’s concept but it didn’t land as hard as Virbius’ closer. up until that point i think it was pretty evenly matched.

good, consistent drops from both. i won’t let my preference in style overshadow the quality of content so that’s why my vote stands as is. could go either way though, because both came out swinging. good shit y’all. made me work for the vote, which i like.

Howl.

[Bag Mandela]

Virb - opener was decent, one of those that seemed written to be performed but still nice nameflip & rhyming. Unf rare / Un frere was fire, I liked that shit. 2nd bar was hard to follow but the unfamiliar line was a nice flip. Solid rhyming throughout, props.

Un- Opener was pretty smooth, verbal alarm concept was creative. Wasn't feeling the 50 shades bar too much, but there was a lot packed in to the last bar & it was well written.

Think you caught Virb on top form and that 50 shades bar seemed like a filler line you just threw in there so I got Virb taking this one. BOTW though 4 sho.

[Zqlkular]

VOTE: Virb

Virb: I liked the overall energy and felt the digs to be more clever. Rhymes were satisfying and there was overall more rhythmic flow and interest.

Unf: Nice dig in the last line. Wasn’t feeling this level of commitment overall though.

Props to both. Battle on ...

[FaQEyeReddit]

Oooof! Ngl I always look forward to these two rhymes im going to be honest as usual.

Virbs opener probably won the battle for me. As I was reading I was like dang some of the unf flips was a bit meh but yet original but the open def I applauded

When reading unf I got the punch punch consistency but the middle line I just felt like lost it for me. Hats off to you both but of course I’m going to be a fair person and vote fair always virb got away with this one

Oh and also sever was I think misspelled to server if I’m correct ing meant sever you veg-table

[HEK TEAFY]

I was wondering if V went over the line limit??
Unf came hard but in my opinion V's unf wordplay took this one the
familia punch was gold...


MVGT= V

good battle

[MV]

Virb

I wanted a break from all the beef and politics and tryna be provocative so I came in thinking I might try to keep it positive coz you’re nice with the rhymes and your themes evocative, and
…Nah fuck that! since it’s starting with Un I must mean the opposite. Let’s go!
this is a looonggg bar. but im not against stretching bars as long as its not out of hand. this was dope. the multies definitely made it read well and added to the punch. not sure if this has been done. before but i liked it.

I’ll shiv this bitch in the ribs til his lungs tear and it’s unfair I’ll take Unf air and his firstborn too, I ain’t done there,
I’ll cook his flesh like a French chef taking some care, come share, we were bros so I’m gonna serve Unf rare (un free).
why did you add (un free) you meant un frere/unf rare i assume. fire..the punch was dope the set up was icing on a cake

Or it’s something similar just as sinister, I’ll punch this cunt til the lumps disfigure ya,
Gushing blood and viscera, then when his folks can’t identify his corpse, fuck, that’s Unf familial.
this was a solid closer. its a bit statementish so no extra points.


vs

unfuk

This lying puss ain’t a beast, this bitch boutta be dying shook,
They thought Virb’ll alarm us til he sees a Half moon now he’s dying a crying wolf,
the multies were sexy af here. i fuck with this bar. i think unfuk's gun violence might be unmatched

Ima break ya face and choke u til u fade away, beat u til u’re pale and make a tape,
The Video titled: “Fuk whippin this bitch til he’s 50 shades of grey”!,
flow was immaculate, punch a lil sus, no-hetero it was a solid punch overall but unless its a personal i cant give any extra points.

I got meatgrinders to press u thru, Ima shoot you Then server you,
Once we see V, 8 Splash in his body ! Then we taking the corpse & blending the vegetable!

i didnt like this closer. i felt like it had some of the connecting elements missing.

overall i have Virb with more consistency and the higher peaks this round. good showing fellas.
v/Virb