I give you negative feedback because unlike these others guys I actually care if you get better.
I give you negative feedback because unlike these others guys I actually care if you get better.
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nope I give you negative feedback each time too lol.. your writing doesn't suck, just need to understand that horrorcore is played out and holds no substance. When you talk about killing yourself, don't just skip the details and go to the act, explain what lead to it, the mental state of the person, the weather, the air, the mood of the room and atmosphere, the type of music you could imagine playing in the background, is there a dog barking? a breeze blowing through the window from the small crack in the courner.
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think about your topic as if it where a scene in a movie and you are the director... now explain that entire scene to us before moving on with the story, this adds a backdrop and sets people up to begin getting emotionally involved with your charactor.
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Literally make love to your topic.
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Gonna play some Old Republic before I go to work, maybe after I get off.
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