Heartbroken- Rizzo
My first piece ever like this. Critique would be greatly appreciated.
Wordz - What we went through
An Exit
I felt as if, A four foot dagger went piercing through my chest
A voice in my head was telling me that I did not do my best
It kept hitting me and pounding on my head, screaming and yelling
Telling me I had not done my job correctly
It told me I had given no support, and that I can go fuck my self.
I agreed to this voice of nothing but had meant something.
Everything it was telling me was true, As I sat down in the visitor area.
Tears started falling down my eyes,
Thinking, why my life?
Why me? How could this be?
As I arose, thinking as god looked on each side of my nose
Does he see hatred? Denial?
I walk over to the baby's window, and see
That my baby had had only a couple of breaths
Before he died.
And that it was supposed to be in the bed right in front of me
But he lays next to his dead mother
I started crying, screaming, the whole hospital looked at me
A doctor suggest that I see a psychiatrist
I told him to fuck off and go fuck himself
As I was full of anger, ready to kill someone.
All I wanted was to have a nice time with the 2 people I loved most.
But, it didn't happen, So I ran home, I had to flee.
I didn't know what to do, I took the .45
Pulled the trigger, and met with the ones I loved most,
My family.
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