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Thread: From one J~O~B 2da next

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    Thumbs down From one J~O~B 2da next

    Vrz1
    4 a while I liked sitt~n at home/it was relax~n
    it was no more bagelz/muffinz/no rushing/no wrapping/
    No walk~n/No Bernie/No Pat and/
    no Arlene/and none of dem corperation bastardz/
    It was if I don't want 2/den i don't have 2/
    no filthy red shirt/no 8 hours of pure hassle/
    and no manager trynna manage ya/
    2 take out da trash/
    and no more half of my check/going 2wardz catch~n cabz/
    but on da off side/there was no more check/
    there was no moe free burgerz/
    no more tax 2 collect/
    no more cell phone/
    although that i could accept/
    cuz i prefer seeing my true friendz all direct/
    there was no Yoslandi/there was no more Douglas/
    no more Martha/
    then there was bye bye budget/
    no more yoska/no more nancy/
    no more juicey/no more movies/
    no more caesar/no more shana/no more lewis/
    no more mone/there was no more lexy/
    no more catch u later when jason went home/
    no more diane/and No more Nea/No more Dana/
    u see the downside was jus way more greater/
    sitt~n broke/think~n i need way more paper/
    so i signed up on monster/started read~n da paper/

    da chorus is me talk~n...while somebody singz and harmonizes n da background...y'all prolly don't care 4 all dat...so we'll keep it move~n

    Vrz2
    Told myself I'd have a plan if I ever quit again/
    but this (ME)/so u know I went and did the shit again/
    still listen~n/you'd think a smart guy like me/
    would have a fall back plan after dat last V/
    but cash comes eaze/maybe not free/
    I'ma hard worker/those 2 wordz define me/
    here's where I be/dirty JER to da Z to da E/
    and den finish wit da y/Oh I'm/
    still writing verses/and den writing dese hookz/
    and with all da writing I do/thought I would write me a book/
    It's a Sci~fi/about space/gears/and crookz/
    and how thingz always connect/regardless of how it lookz/
    I always speak truth/can't mix dat up/
    and when da book come out/make sure 2 pick dat up
    trynna have so many projectz da list rackz up/
    might jump n2 some poerty/shit u never know wit me/
    i'm jus way too different and out of da box/
    jus str8 unorthodox(it'z work~n)
    merge~n wit da best/and ones i respect/
    so a very hot summer/I suggest u expect/
    there's a bar on my chest/fuck a S/datz typical/
    my bar~code standz out/yes/feel da principles/
    whether it be text/or i take it back 2 trackz/
    whatever I do/.....U can label it a wrap

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    Re: From one J~O~B 2da next

    I can't say I know what you mean or I've been there cause I've never had a job in my life, but through your rhymes you definitely had a story and made me understand where you're comin from... very nice flow and substance =)

    "no more yoska/no more nancy/
    no more juicey/no more movies/
    no more caesar/no more shana/no more lewis/
    no more mone/there was no more lexy/
    no more catch u later when jason went home/
    no more diane/and No more Nea/No more Dana/"

    Repetition in those lines with "no more" definitely put things in perspective displayin the loss... the ending though, I just wish it had a little more power in it, but still on point.
    Last edited by SpitItReal27; June 4th, 2009 at 01:26 PM

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    Re: From one J~O~B 2da next

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...html?p=7076572


    appreciate da critism...gracias


    i'ma go back n and fix dat...not right now...but i will
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