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    Star gazin

    the beautiful illuminations cluttering the night's skies
    sparks and gleams the hope that i see through my eyes
    the black night's darkness has been punctured by God's touch
    and heaven's light rains down, i shift gears and grab clutch
    dream's are designed and derived from the mind and soul within
    i stay steady to my hopes and dreams, followin' my mortal mission
    my back is moist from the dew heavy laid on the grass i lie on
    the blades brush my shoulder and i am there for her to cry on
    we share beloved secrets with one another, in our haven together
    and when weather won't permit our conference, i scribble letters
    the symbols are meaningless, i write them out of preoccupation
    they lack meaning without words, the light is my compensation
    the mystical views are intangible so i view with steady awe
    the sunset breathes her name and says 'when you'r ready, call'
    damn the night i don't call, and instead slumber in spite of you
    may my hands and eyes be cursed as well as my words and writing tools
    i succumb to a census full of ignorance and greed, hate and malice
    but i forget it all, and connect star lights to form my soul's palace
    i've deceived myself with foolish inferences and the likes of others
    if my eyes are the window to my soul, dear God, please close these shudders
    and let those shudders open again to the light when time will allow
    and to those drunken embodiments i associate, may i receive strength to disavow
    the night is not eerie, though crime be commited and soul's cry in anguish
    the star light brings forth an open canvas that my eyes have carefully painted
    the sharpness and exactness of the stars is fine like a porcupine's quills
    and although i whisper forgotten secrets to heaven's breath, i think still
    i'm trapped amongst many ignorant fools, societies with hazing and shit
    i keep my eyes to the skies and stars, and i stay truthfully gazing at it

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    i was reading it, decided it was long and wasnt sure I wanted to read it, but i read the whole thing cuz your just a very good writer
    connect starlights to form my souls palace
    close the shutters
    jus your a very good writer, with ON POINT flow and scheme
    i look forward to more drops
    and your other drop before this one was dope too
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    I Like The Way Ya Words Connected
    Nice Creativity,nice Flow,and Structure

    It Was A Lil Long But Well Worth Reading
    Keep It Up And You Well Be Dope If Ya Keep At It.



    Nice Stuff On This Peice

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    thx you

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    the best in this was the immagery , the way you portrayed it.... and your flow was pretty smooth, with decent transitions... still inernals could be worked on.... again, love the sig.... reminds me of an ex girl...lmfao...j/k... [are they false teeth or your own....lol]... id maybe take a couple of syllables outta your lines... for writtens...
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    Iiigh thx for the feedback any more

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    Re: Star gazin

    yeah anymore

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    Re: Star gazin

    Lmao!!
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