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    perspectives of a soldier

    I stand alone, looking at the demise of this sickness
    the dust settles, I hear a few cries in the distance
    of little children, locked within this panic and fear
    the damage severe, what if I had my family here?
    would I still hold this gun? would I still fight?
    would I laugh tonight if my child met the afterlife?
    these questions I can't answer, the bubble just bust
    I see thousands of memories trapped under rubble and dust
    just a city of smoke, I pity the folk that are left in this zone
    all those swept from their homes without flesh on their bones
    and I'm no hero, how can I believe I'm a better man
    when I'm surrounded by terror and a legion of skeletons?
    theres no need for itelligence, it's plain to see
    that this child in my arms was slain by me
    and the rotting flesh fills the air with a terrible smell
    now a city of ghosts stand at the gates of heaven and hell
    and I'm panicking, cos the pool of blood I'm standing in
    is luke warm, my boots torn, feet covered in bandages
    my body aches, my hands wobbly, shake from the torment
    whilst the world hails the victory as the greatest performance
    they've ever seen, but this dreaded dream is never-ending
    the thoughts of death, sores on flesh and severed tendons
    is killing me! yet I march with a task to slaughter
    carrying only a rifle, my pride and a flask of water
    I hate this shit! a dictatorship, no soul is equal
    we've fueled the fire of a fools desire to control his people
    my tears are invisible, I could break a bone
    and I'd still be expressionless wearing this face of stone
    so unmask this demon, and put a hole in my chest
    break all my bones and rip my flesh, and finaly put this sorrow to rest....

    my first om in ages
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    shit straight fire...nice mettas..multies...flow...creativity...deepness
    overall=a very very nice drop ill shit.............................................. ....................................shit fuckin ill dude i didnt even have a favorite part.........

    THE WHOLE THING WAS!

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    good peice....i was feeling the topic

    it was quite interesting...

    flow was on point i felt it all the way

    good rhymes scheme...

    overall this was good...keep it up.

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    i remember reading this exact drop b4 this site was done over hmm.... whoeva is the real artist it's a good piece
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    that shit was tight man good topic interesting
    go comment jelousy is envy its some deep shit

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    Great wordplay. The flow was incredible. The story was awsome. The metaphores were wonderful. And I loved this peice. Keep this shit up but dont stop the gfx. 9-10. peace.

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