Star(freestyle)

[lyr!cal m!racle]

this a quick 16...

the day of July 23rd 1990 was the beggining of a new era
thats the day i was born and like remy ill bring ya sqaud terror
im the hot one... fuck satan... if i catch ya ass hatin
then youll them pumps in our hands like we at a gas station
say ya grace cuz im amazin i came to this game now im dominatin
im raps constipation i make it hard for other artist to come out
u better than me? ....... nope man im better than most
the only way youll be good is if i write some shit for ya ghost
remember this quote? " a mind is a terrible thing to waste"
dont waste ya mind, u like trashy watches just a waste of time
save ya rhymes... if they sleepin on me... soon they gon be wakin
i'm the blast from the past... slash/... the future in the makin
im a killa nigga i be in the streets... i like the shootin
blow ya brains out and make you go dumb like th hyphy movement
ya life what you losin... im betta by far boy
i dont twinkle or get wished upon but u know im a star boy

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=292611
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=292489

^^^ 2 links

[DrunknMonkey]

Hot shit!!!1 Could've been a bit longer....was feeling the self glory drop....Voab wasn't to impressive but it got the job done..Good Shit .......Keep It Up

[Big C.]

not bad for a freestyle. topic was alright i guess?
flow was descent, but good in places.
rhymes were good, could have used more multies
you had a few but still should use more
overall this was aight.

[Engivale]

ummm - mixed feelings. I think it lacked originality in almost every aspect, but that aside it being a "freestyle", if there is such a thing when you're writing it down and posting it on a site, it had an okay delivery. I say okay as a stretch I suppose, I think you may want to keep working on it, also your spelling and writing structure in general needs some help just to make it more readable... keep it up.