Star crossed lovers

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P.Status- Black
Midnyte- Gray

So lonely and confused~ so into you~tell me what should I do
I’m feelin used~ words construed~leavin my heart so weak and abused//
absurd, slured by the terms I've used when you Inferred the truth
Im concerned the youth will have to purge in too
Did you lie or try to let things slide~can’t even look straight in my eyes
Took things in stride~ seems my love and heart are suddenly denied//
at time's I've constrived lies that I thrive to define to you're minds eye's
while I tried to derive from twined lines In my prime time //
U need to realize ur hurting me~open ur eyes more and face reality
I can only hold on so long to the edge of a ledge before I’m falling free//
I feel like i've derailed you see, casualties impound my mind with mortalities
so how shall i Impale morality when my mentality's gone to frailty //
So close back in the day ~I never strayed~it’s a wicked game u play
Torn in two between love and tears always wonder should I go or stay//
contained, still I've managed to maintain my ways while the situations change
deranged by the way it remains the same, but we still make love the same way //

Just wanting your attentions~love and affections~tired of passive aggression
I love you baby boy….but this silence got me beggin and stressin//

Im infested by the word's that i've kept ingested, shown you only minor attention
left blind and suspended when my only mind's intentions strived convention //

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[Johnny 6-feet]

A good back and forth style between you and midnight, the complexity of the rhymes was a weakness here, but the emotion was conveyed in the piece and you both stayed flawlessly on topic. your vocab, P, was pretty impressive too. more details in the imagery would've been good but it was a nice little piece to read anyway.

keep posting, if you could rep my piece "a criminal's argument" i'd appricaite the feedback.

[CrazyCarl]

I liked how you continued the rhyme, when switching parts. The multis were good in both, filled up the lines nicely. The emotion you got across was a positive of the piece. P Status, you had a little more complex part, with the vocab you used. Your styles are similiar, with about the sam rhyme scheme.
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