Stand Up Stand Up

[Brother Blue Collar]

Stand up!!! Stand up!!!

Never hang ya head in shame, bang til we land in a grave, g
slanging white fo real gave us our claim to fame and bravery
workin up that slavery type of sweat way i put in work
don't give up and try calling in sick, not even if it's hurt
work hard to get mine, fuck whoever can't thiers after me
got protection and my gun, requirements for bucking b
i am a child of the sheets fuck the streets cuz if you thought
this was a net gangsta hit from another thug you brought
into the shit i wrote, but i was really talking bout
involves moaning, groaning and sumtimes a very loud shout

[Daz]

It was an ok Peice.

There's flow problems in the verse.
And limited choice of Vocab which kinda stifles the read.
But it was ok.

[YoungTuan]

it was good..thought it was gonna be better

[Johnny 6-feet]

it was really short for a start, the subject matter was the standard stuff i see in rb. i found the vocab a little simplistic, some multi's would've helped this out. i think if you tackled an original subject the result would be greater.

keep posting and keep elavating.

[spokenoh]

Short, but slowly you are elevating, and becoming a more mature writer. I really liked the conscious lyrics, and your emotion and writer's voice. I gave you a review over AIM, so yeah, this is short. Keep it up, Urb, Peace.

[Teedub]

give you 6 out of 10 for this. I can tell you got talent, but simple structure and vocab lowered the standard for me I'm afraid. Also, the way you have set out the bars makes it difficult to flow (its probably easy for you cos you wrote it tho, and thats what matters!)but keep it up.peace