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    Within The Trenches

    Within The Trenches

    Seyance/Seklusion collab.

    A dark mist falls between our paths...
    is it me? or have i finally met my match...
    i claimed the patch..we're gettin no closer...
    drowned in doubt, i ask myself..
    ..why did i become a soldier?.. i ponder....
    as the wisps of white hot metal flys above...

    Times are tough- shown by the way bodies are lining up
    We died enough; cadavers all around me dried in blood
    Bullets whisk by barely missin', wearily listen
    The prayer for God is drown out by bullets
    Retaliate! Find the trigger- pull it.

    can i reach the summit, and hold my head high...
    or will i plummit.. forever- living a lie...
    gaze at the sky.. nothing.. except a dark cloud...
    interrupted.. by shouts.. of the dieing around...
    the signs mound up, that i wont escape...
    this sight of bloodshed- may never leave my face...

    Speed the pace, trying desperately not to flee this place
    Retreat with grace? More of a war with myself- brain is clashin'
    Stomach twisted ever since I ate this ration, chest is gaspin'
    Inhaling the poison, this is the end I was avoidin'
    Take our last stand, in all our grandeur- "Why?" is the only matter on our mind
    Never will we get an answer

    Just stand here in the muddy meadow of flowers...
    as the barbed hedge row towers... i cower...
    a sour taste.. tryin to hide my self in my mind...
    unaware of time, is it still night or just the grime... of..
    ..a world undefined, green for miles.. i see...
    a green gas enters my lungs.. until...
    my soul's the only remaining part of me..

    Sorry! Just commands from a boss
    Stare at the cost- all the soldiers we lost
    Was it worth it, I wonder?
    Previously a perfect summer, coated in arms
    Plenty letters to mother, but victory is ours…
    I'm so fly, they sent for a swat team to stop me.

    HenceForward.


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    EpistemologyRaps
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    Plenty letters to mother, but victory is ours…

    powerful. very descriptive with your imagery and the observation of your senses are very attune in this piece. you speak of all the things a soldier does ponder while on the battle field. he thinks of the rations you mentioned and he thinks of why he joined the service in the first place along with all the other things that you had mentioned. really a powerful piece.

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