...On A Naked Tree [ft.Langston Hughes]

[Chris Black]

Much love to everyone that read so far. All favors returned.

-W1

[Zav]

Immensely felt. I'd have to say this was a excellent piece. I'll be on the look out for further work from you.


"I’ve been laying here hours; as lazy as it may seem
When the phone wakes me from my daydreams...
I picked up the receiver, and soon, I seeped a tear...
The message killed me slowly as it reached my ear."


Dope.

[Chris Black]

Thanks. Uppin' this.

-W1

[Prince Adem]

Some weird shit.. but interesting

Good structure.. very easy on the eyes and lay out nicely... I liked the chorus/hook... The story was told well, and there was alot of nice imagery in there

I could picture the whole thing in my head, it was told so well... keep this up

You even had a dope rhyme scheme.. consistent multies and internals, good work on that

9/10

Keep writing

[Bigg E Z]

..I liked this very much

You O.M writting Spike Lee, you..!!

..lol, Seriously, This had good imagery, Flow was hard to get, But once found it fitted in

Simple vocab, But it worked so god damn well.. I dont think the highest of vocab would have done this piece any favours..

This is a good bloody read..

..Its 7am here, and iv been up all night

& this is what i see before me.. Note - IM NOT COMPLAINING =)

[+Danny Ocean+]

I loved this piece. It wasn't too long either. Well.... the emotion was strong. The imagery was on point and made this really enjoyable to read. I found myself anticipating the end. Which rarely ever happens so good job. Nice use of vocab. Not too much and not too little but it complimented your piece. Nice flow and structure. Overall I think this was a 10/10. Should be nominated for legend if it's not already.

[Chris Black]

^It's not. Thanks for peeping it, everyone.

-W1

['PercepTion']

Took aother read to understand the flow
on this, lol, but when i did i really got into
it...It flow pretty fluently, nice cmoplex
rhymes, nothing was really simplistic or
anything. Nice topic, was full of gritty,
real & heartfelt emotion and it, it really
shone thru..dope.

" All the bystanders that gathered around this tree of evil
Then I slowly proceed to creep to the sea of people"
- nice line there, but if i wanted to quote
all the lines i liked i'd have to copy & paste
the full piece......4.5/

[Andrew..]

Nice Peice. This was a very emotional peice. With some good imagery. A very deep choice of topic. Good flow throughout the whole thing. Very nice structure. Very good job. Keep dropping W1. I nominated it for Legends.


-Wise

[shawty"B"]

i loved this peice, it had so much emotion to it, and the imagery was great, (plus the picture just adds a completely different level to this peice). it flows out real well and it keep the reader very interested, and wanting more. gread peice....


....bless

[Chris Black]

Thanks for the love. I just saw this was nominated for Legends. Good lookin', guys.

-W1