Heart of Darkness

[DeftFlow]

Inspired by the book by Joseph Conrad, about a European sailor that travels through the Congo.

Heart of darkness-
its this far apartness that creates the lack of hard logic.
The black man-or rather, is he man or animal?
i tell you i been held captive next to cannibals
they've done less damage than I,
the real savage, mismanage the food rations
just to save a dime, let em starve in famish
crazy right?
But hey it pays me
stereotypes, mysogeny slavery
these is the things, that make it hard to save me
there is no light and any you see is an illusion, its trickery, its really black as hickory
that's the smoke that rise in infamy.
The sun was enveloped inevitably by Ebony, the one black
force that dragged it from the sky, and made it scared to come back.
An anomole, I call it foul and strange,
i once listened in the night to hear it howl in pain,
tangled vines that leave the mind mangled,
you runnin out of time to find, who the devils who the angels
you cant even remember sky blue
It's right behind it finds you, blinds you
wraps you tight around its finger, and painfully unwinds you.
Yo it doesnt even matter now, how i'm displayed
I used to say I was fearless but now i'm afraid
and weighed by the black maze that move through the mind rather than space
a taste of sorrow and pain and a look at its face.
In this world, a timid moon
mean a limited view,
a small flicker of hope you'll find the perimeter soon,
walkin infinite dunes in a desert of dark,
the weather is stark,
raindrops that fall to clean ya head and ya thoughts.
It led me to the epitome of irony, the heart of darkness is tired of me,
my prior beliefs is mixed up, i been gifted since birth
these people around me now is nomads of the earth
I'm switched up by natural greed,
avarice see, that made the backs of the disadvantaged, bleed.
A fact, it opened up my eyes a little, just a crack
to reveal the only color i find inside myself- is black


Thanks so much in advance, I know there's some cats here who can really help me
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...51#post7643951

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...54#post7643954

[$Lil Saint$]

Inspired by the book by Joseph Conrad, about a European sailor that travels through the Congo.

Heart of darkness-
its this far apartness that creates the lack of hard logic.
The black man-or rather, is he man or animal?
i tell you i been held captive next to cannibals
Nice verse feeling it
they've done less damage than I,
the real savage, mismanage the food rations
just to save a dime, let em starve in famish
like your Vocb
crazy right?
But hey it pays me
stereotypes, mysogeny slavery
these is the things, that make it hard to save me
there is no light and any you see is an illusion, its trickery, its really black as hickoryGood flow on it
that's the smoke that rise in infamy.
The sun was enveloped inevitably by Ebony, the one black
force that dragged it from the sky, and made it scared to come back
Could of been slightly more creatvie on that verse.
An anomole, I call it foul and strange,
i once listened in the night to hear it howl in pain,
tangled vines that leave the mind mangled
Alright this time you stepped up good verse ,
you runnin out of time to find, who the devils who the angels
you cant even remember sky blue
It's right behind it finds you, blinds you
Creative/Good Flow/Good vocb
wraps you tight around its finger, and painfully unwinds you.
Yo it doesnt even matter now, how i'm displayed
I used to say I was fearless but now i'm afraid
Alright Diplayed/Afriad goo rhyme indeed
and weighed by the black maze that move through the mind rather than space
a taste of sorrow and pain and a look at its face.
In this world, a timid moon
mean a limited view,
a small flicker of hope you'll find the perimeter soon,
walkin infinite dunes in a desert of dark,
the weather is stark,
raindrops that fall to clean ya head and ya thoughts.
It led me to the epitome of irony, the heart of darkness is tired of me,
my prior beliefs is mixed up, i been gifted since birth
these people around me now is nomads of the earth
I'm switched up by natural greed,
avarice see, that made the backs of the disadvantaged, bleed.
Shit i skipped straight to this,is my favriote verse good job
A fact, it opened up my eyes a little, just a crack
to reveal the only color i find inside myself- is black


Thanks so much in advance, I know there's some cats here who can really help me
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...51#post7643951

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...54#post7643954

ok you did pretty damn good
Summery
Multies 3/5
Good verses 4/5
Wack verses 1/5
Flow 4/5
Ok i will give you a 7/10 good job yo and you Mind giving some feedback-
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...042/index.html

[DeftFlow]

Thanks for the feedback man, I really appreciate it

[rhymebad]

deftflow this wasa nice for real but this partright remind me of an interlude how you separated this from all the other parts

But hey it pays me
stereotypes, mysogeny slavery
these is the things, that make it hard to save me

[DeftFlow]

thanks for the feed. uppin

[SonUDaily]

flow: was proper
multis: good
meta's: good
enjoyment: decent drop

7/10 keep droping them head banggers