Championship: P. Macto vs. Cry

[Chris Black]

Rules

[P. Mortuus]

Check and Luck.

[Cody Nash]

sup, baby.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...vs-385159.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...es-385157.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...vs-385153.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...vs-385155.html


almost couldn't vote lol... I'm on my computer right now but mu'fucka's got a virus and exits the page constantly. you've no idea how hard it was to read all pieces and vote rofl.

[Cody Nash]

My Brain-to-Heart Ratio
By: Cry





People think I'm a ghost now, my thoughts often morbid,
I've misplaced my heart, and the how's not important...
it's more than crossed my mind, that I wish I could cross my mind,
but I can't shake it, numbers didn't add up when I lost my wife.



She was perfect and amazing, superb and tasty...
I could always break free; leave it to her to save me,
two heads are better, but hers was aching,
a point five and not by choice I'm... hurt and quaking
inside, she dies; my earth is shaking, now I'm celibate,
and if the love is gone, then I'm out of my element,
now in hell I sit... yet, I'm still above ground and shit?
really, sleeping and waking's like going out and in...
I'm bound to rips that carry me to the deep end
but can't drown in it, I'm alone and I need friends,
I can barely breath and... just before I die...
I wake and I cry - because the devil's in my mind,
with his white lies, using my blind eye to make me see;
but not clear enough to see where he's taking me...
I'm mistaking treats for horrible distaste and evil,
and I've never seen hell, but I bet my place is equal,
I replaced the people I'd loved all my life...
killed a hooker again because she asked I call her wife,
and I'm at fault? despite the fact I confide in scraps
neglect the right to have anything be mine but trash?
why would she cry and play with my mind like that?
in no time I've stacked these thoughts to climb my back,
in this place: I'm my lover and friend, and I'm my dad,
and inside of that's a truth I have no chance concealing,
it's like I'm sleeping... but where I stand's a real dream,
right next to her on the couch,
- and she can't feel me!



People think I'm a ghost now, my thoughts often morbid,
I've misplaced my heart, and the how's not important...
it's more than crossed my mind, that I wish I could cross my mind,
but I can't shake it, numbers didn't add up when I lost my wife.


http://www.mde-art.com/images/pen-in...ce-drawing.jpg


I loved her...
but I've been thinking too much
and as a ghost,
I'm no longer needing to love;
but to know!
why today my heart is pacing slow...
completely disrupting the brain-to-heart ratio.

[P. Mortuus]

So so Random!


http://www.mde-art.com/images/pen-in...ce-drawing.jpg

Closed caskets & crocodile tears of bastards
Intestines wrapping their gut to silent laughing
I was a morgue minor, a major player from china
A soldier of Vietnam, a veteran left behind ya
A clusterfuck roadside Romeo, but sure I flowed
Don’t criticize me you don’t know me hoe;
I’m not a bland band man that stands being a Stan
So I flee on a killing spree, till the knife lands in my hand
Then I let it go free to slice ribbons freely;
While I splice the chilies of life to form a meaty wife she
Seems to think I’m silly; Dr. Frankenstein
Can’t stand lyin’ so I pray to be flying
But I’m no hero…not a Petrelli boy
Or Claire who can’t act for shit but acts coy
I’m no one, a villain of zero caliber, I part with no style
so I smile- crooked teeth been yellow for a while
it’s a rainy day when villain are praised,
heroes delayed at bus stands as I race past…smile on my face
lace cast on my darling, she’s fine with being fine
call me Elvis cause my baby don’t stand no cheatin’ line
Elvis cause I steal shit from the weak
Like Little Walter dead before his peak;
I’ve got 20 hands that land blows upon blow users
These coke heads half dead- I hate abusers
So I date rape their wife or girl will do just fine
I’m mental, like this whole piece so detrimental
Release me to these streets to greet the concrete
Why love it so….
cause even I worship the ground under my feet
sit back on the seat sir, read this piece sir
so while you sweat and laugh at this attempt
I release some fluid that will please her
Your girl on her back, knees half bent

Bang Bang, I shot em down…..

[DiC n Ya EyE]

Cry
Narration was really nice and the details of your narrative were well placed and kept the emotional tone of it all. I liked this.... had solid flow and was pretty nice for it's length. Character development didn't really go far... like good times, bad times you and the wife had, memories you have of her, saying what it is about her you miss.. more than just saying you miss her.. shit like that, but it would have to be longer for that... still liked the content though. good shit

P Mac
Interesting format and narration for a verse..... going to point out the things I liked most first..... the synical voice of your narration was cool like a radical politician that goes crazy. There were a couple of the first metas I thought were cool and would be pulled into the subject nicely..... There wasn't much content to this though. A lot of metaphorical stuff, but not much detail on the actual subject of the character and his actions. It sounds like a mad man just blowing off steam without explaining himself rationally.

Vote Cry

[Spoken]

Cry- i loved your story. it was packed with great emotion and the content was there of cours eman... you were on point and you came out swinging. this is definetly a championship verse here i mean it wasnt your best honestly dude... but i see you switched your style which didnt effect anything from you man... i mean it was really diffrent from the style im used from you. Ok the metaphors and creativity in this was great man. the details were put nicely. the word assortion was vivid and planned well enough to say this is a great read. the whole:

She was perfect and amazing, superb and tasty...
I could always break free; leave it to her to save me,
two heads are better, but hers was aching,
a point five and not by choice I'm... hurt and quaking
inside, she dies; my earth is shaking, now I'm celibate,
and if the love is gone, then I'm out of my element,

..was superb... i loved the metaphorical use and display here man. i liked the leave it ot her to save me line. shit was real and heart felt. two heads are better but hers was aching was cool a played line but still brings a little flare to it each time i read it cause of it being set up for something better to come along which was.. A point five but not by choice. that was cool man props on that.

with his white lies, using my blind eye to make me see;
but not clear enough to see where he's taking me...

i liked the subtle approach that you pursued in this line. nicely done.

and I'm at fault? despite the fact I confide in scraps
neglect the right to have anything be mine but trash?
why would she cry and play with my mind like that?
in no time I've stacked these thoughts to climb my back,
in this place: I'm my lover and friend, and I'm my dad,

This was were i felt a little bothered cause you had four lines rhyme then you had a fifth line set up but then it goes into a new rhyme... which is

and inside of that's a truth I have no chance concealing,
it's like I'm sleeping... but where I stand's a real dream,
right next to her on the couch,
- and she can't feel me!

Going straight into a three line rhyme man... i guess htough if that is how you made it to be then so be it nah mean.. so props on this verse i loved it and i liked how you changed your finesse and style nicely done and put together.

P. Macto- now you said it was done last minute...in which you were hoping for it to be done later nah mean... but oh well right.. you still dropped with style and creativity to its finest... now i dont agree with DIC on this about your content not being up to par cause i see alot nah mean. you had it planned to its best in the span of time you had left to write and i give you props cause even with that being done you managed to put a dope verse together that out-weights the most verses done in like three days in a few minutes.props.
BREAKDOWN?!...ok

Closed caskets & crocodile tears of bastards
Intestines wrapping their gut to silent laughing
I was a morgue minor, a major player from china
A soldier of Vietnam, a veteran left behind ya
A clusterfuck roadside Romeo, but sure I flowed
Don’t criticize me you don’t know me hoe;
I’m not a bland band man that stands being a Stan
So I flee on a killing spree, till the knife lands in my hand

The fuckin sickness in this was great man. the flow was priceless dude... for reals man.. i loved the clusterfuck roadside romeo; that shit be really illy man... i loved the creativeness in that man. also loved the bland band man.. to not wanting to be a stan; great dude. props on that.

Then I let it go free to slice ribbons freely;
While I splice the chilies of life to form a meaty wife she

somewhat awkward but still be nicely done man. i loved the slice ribbons man.. props on that shit homie. the chilly shit lmfao i laughed at that shit illy.

lace cast on my darling, she’s fine with being fine
call me Elvis cause my baby don’t stand no cheatin’ line
Elvis cause I steal shit from the weak
Like Little Walter dead before his peak;
I’ve got 20 hands that land blows upon blow users
These coke heads half dead- I hate abusers
So I date rape their wife or girl will do just fine
I’m mental, like this whole piece so detrimental
Release me to these streets to greet the concrete
Why love it so….
cause even I worship the ground under my feet

Loved this man... my favorite stanzas that stood out the most it seemed so complete than your others dude. OK this verse you put was illy but as it shows you rushed and i read it in your verse man... some minor errors of grammar and some awkward placed word assortion man... sorry to say such a thing man... but ey! props still i saw this battle to be real nicely done but as far as it being a championship battle i thought that you guys could have brought the best outta both of you but i didnt really see it but ey! still solid drops from both.... but i have ot go with

V-Cry

[Ace of Aces]

coo battle.

Cry I thought you had an interesting take on the topic. Obviously this is the topic of the week and I think that your narration was more entertaining the most. Flow was at a top level and everything went smooth. Only friction that I had was grasping all the emotion because for some reason the tone of the verse sounded too matter of factish to draw out enough emotion. P. Macto you did pretty good for a rushed verse. flow was on point and everything ran smooth for me. Only problem is that I think that the content was not nearly as interesting as Crys and it sounded to me that you didnt even like the topic so much yourself, which is why you didnt appear to have any distinct direction. maybe maybe not, but I think you held back a bit this week.

v/Cry for an overall better verse.

[Nahlidge]

Vote - Cry

Maybe I`m dumb. But the picture threw me off lol. Other than that I think you took this battle easily. Macto`s piece was everywhere to me. And I mean he named it "so so random" so it makes since. Not seein` it was bad. I just enjoyed Cry`s drop better. Planned out pieces beat randomness to me. And I think Cry murdered Macto with his rhyme scheme/flow as well. Good job on that.

[Brandon Cee]

Awww, my boys are growing up so fast.

Cry - You dropped better against me, point blank, but I think your concept was much better in terms of outline and follow through. You completed the story this time, which made this way stronger as a whole. The flow went on and off for me, even though it seemed you were trying hard on that, which in turn showed in your content as well. Overall, this was good, but not great.

Baron - You're on the come around from poetry back to SS and you're almost back to where you were in Season 6 against Cry and myself, I just think you came a little too poetic and left out quite a bit of detail this week, which hurt you really. Flow was solid, content was quite good for what you gave me, but I just didn't find this as complete as Cry's piece man. Overall, you did ok, but it wasn't enough here man.

v/Cry

[Chris Black]

Cry wins.