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    The Dream Girl [Grandeza]

    The Dream Girl
    Pique And Ntalek


    I've dreamed blissfully.

    Golden threads covering beauty
    no more angelic then any goddess
    one generous soul of perfection
    words of intelligence, oh so honest.


    Ventured to an unimaginable love
    though words weren't exchanged
    because of the actions scream
    finding myself lost in a sea of wonders.

    Drowning in her sea of affection
    I'm accepted way before day one
    swimming through curving waves
    grabbing land; and our race is done.


    My arms heavy from the lengthy hugs.
    My feet cant move they're stuck
    in a sand pit of disbelief,
    as my eyes grow skeptic to beauty...

    with vocals that seem to lead society
    every living animal following her shadow
    a parade of purity for my own amuse
    her masquerade; is yet my only gallows.


    The day has brought forth my future,
    and by nights end, my emotions will be stewed.
    Articulation at it's best.

    The sky's blue blackens like the deepest ocean;
    reaching out to grab a reflection-like hand,
    her facial expression shows all different emotions.


    What was once a dream now reality.
    Her shape good enough for the second gulp.
    an elongated hair sways a flag like flutter.
    Deja' Vu. I'm overwhelmed with mixed views.

    who was once only my imaginary love,
    now stands face to face with her own
    stuck in a highly confused state of thought
    just how real can my fictionated vixen show?


    Her voice sounds; waves crash.
    The sand beneath my sinking feet crumbles
    upon arrival of her earthly tone.
    A florist smell reaches my nostrils.
    I feel love weighing down my shoulders
    As my charred eyes grace the blazing sun.

    Thoughts proved wrong, my guardian angel;
    turns out death was only the new beginning,
    how did I enter the afterlife without knowing?
    my dream girl's my eternity, here lies a new ending.

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    Re: The Dream Girl [Grandeza]

    Drop links, not Z's.

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    Re: The Dream Girl [Grandeza]

    wut's Z's?

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    Re: The Dream Girl [Grandeza]

    Cracker Joe - You did well man. I told you on AIM, most of this was solid, but some of it was just ok too. Good work though, all in all. I found your shit to fit well with Ntalek's without taking anything away from the piece as a whole, so good shit. Keep it coming. Dope images were shown here.

    Barack O-wannabe - You were the backbone of the piece, which was obviously done on purpose. I don't you outshined Bell, but you were very good here man. One of your best so far in my opinion and I think you painted some good shit, image-wise, too.

    Overall, good shit. A good job with a played idea, good shit. Keep up. peace.
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    Re: The Dream Girl [Grandeza]

    ups.

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    Re: The Dream Girl [Grandeza]

    UPs.

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    Re: The Dream Girl [Grandeza]

    First off all let me say Nsight I'm glad your dropping a lot more in PS your improving and its showing my dude and glad to see two grandeza members putting us on the map.Pique had a very solid above his skill level drop.You brought a nice level of imagery more then what you drop most of the time which is showing that your improving to.And Nsight you like B rad said was the backbone of the piece.Very well drop please rtf by leaving feed on my new piece Pique. Nice shit stay up both keep putting us on the map.
    Kiss me through the camera lens.
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