Thanks for all the preciation, i will surely check out all ya stuff no doubt
Thanks for all the preciation, i will surely check out all ya stuff no doubt
Kiss me through the camera lens.TNL
Bang......Bang.........Uppin'
Uppin'
Kiss me through the camera lens.TNL
Uppin' again
Kiss me through the camera lens.TNL
Last uppin' for the day
Kiss me through the camera lens.TNL
was nice verse but i wasnt feelin it it could use some flow to it and try to make more sense but was a nice peice overall 9/10 keep writing peace.
That line was playboy...God lays down 3 kings, he grins, distaste spreads on Satan’s face
Faux grace, the tables are turned as Satan reveals an Ace
Your vocab was consistent and very good. Its common that people either A.over due vocabualry or B. dont have any... you did a good job on keeping it through out and not exceeding yourself. The story line itself was awsome. Yet another way to look at religion and is basis. The structure was a little off, but who am I to talk about structure.. *rolls eyes* Good drop Paki... keep them coming
I'm not back...I'm simply bored out of my mind.
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Thanks for the preciation everyone
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