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    Corpse Massacre - His Art

    piled in death, corpse rotten in flesh
    the scent repelled demons, caught in this mess
    a nest so grotest, the human eye would bleed
    and the nose would run blood, to listen or to read
    reflection of satan indeed, serial killers masterpiece
    he stands tall with his axe, takes pride in slashing each
    with no regret at ease, his heart was black and dull
    he spit on the corpse, with no remorse at all
    a sickened scene, viewing knifes stuck in between...
    a 2 year olds spleen, and a mother still grasping her teen
    but he calls it his art, his expressions were gore
    instead of stopping his brush, he painted it more
    the strokes were deep, impailing while the kids peep
    scream a echoes leap, while the red blood seeps
    locked in a basement, it felt like enslavement
    bodies layed across the pavement, lined in perfect placement
    you can call it sick, but he'll never pass this blur
    he holds the knife as he says "forever corpse massacre"

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    nice yo..u only 14...good ish fosho
    vocab decent rhymes iz good and poetic

    could of been a lil longer so i could get into it more

    u show a good understanding of lyrisism

    you'd better reply to some other posts and leave the links in your thread. or a mod will close this


    stay up

    pz
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    You need 2 links to 2 open mics you've left decent feedback on or this will be closed. If you up this again without links it will be closed.

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    ..This piece was str8 for most of it...gotta give you props as you only 14..
    but i would say to you is try working on multi's as they really set an OM off...aight.?

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