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  1. August 9th, 2005, 11:23 PM #1
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    Letter to ma cuzin...

    Just for a minute i wanna put ma beef to da side
    And i just wanna chill and have ma arms open wide
    I never experiecened dis feeling but it feels so good
    At da age of three my parents got ma ass out da hood
    Now i have a pretty average life,but still beef and hate
    But i got ma cuzin and ma friends and it feels so great
    I just wanna have fun like i use too way back in da day
    Now it's all beef and disses But i just wish it went away
    Cuz it just aint ma life and i have dreams to pursue
    It defenetly aint da hustle cuz it aint what i do....
    I never had a gurl not even once in ma life
    It really brings me down just wanna cut maself wit a knife
    This shit really hurts and i cant take away da pain
    So many games to mantain but da feelin wont change
    Iam kinda sorry for what i did and da things i became
    There just so many obstacles that i cant manage in ma brain
    Maybe this is just how life's suppose to be.....
    Hate,pain,and joy are harsh but it's all that you see
    Too many un-answered questions in life,You just ask why
    Most of da time i just feel like givin up and tryin to die
    But that aint da answer and you just gotta make it
    Remove ya self from da dark and keep da fire in you lit
    Life's full of surprises man what can i say
    Since day one you helped me out cuz you showed me da way
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  2. August 9th, 2005, 11:43 PM #2
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    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=216093

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  3. August 9th, 2005, 11:46 PM #3
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    Yo nice drop. Pretty deep shit. Nice emotion, alright vocab, good flow, n da lil bit of multi's u had in there mad it dat much betta. Good job. Keep em comin. RTF on da linkz in my sig.
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  4. August 9th, 2005, 11:54 PM #4
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    ya that was deep, but i hope u weren't serious bout the killin ureself part thats not c00... good flow tho keep at it
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  5. August 10th, 2005, 12:10 AM #5
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  6. August 10th, 2005, 12:38 AM #6
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  7. August 10th, 2005, 01:12 AM #7
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    you had some good emotion..good imagery..everything else was pretty simple..but i think that went well with your piece..keep elevatin your flow and incorporating some complexity in there...~1~


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  8. August 10th, 2005, 01:14 AM #8
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    ayo this was some deep shit right chea...nice imagey i was definitly feelin dis piece
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  9. August 10th, 2005, 06:29 AM #9
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    this piece was nice..its somethin pplz can relate to, jus in different situations... nice drop, keep it up... n dont be serious bout tha killin! lol
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  10. August 10th, 2005, 07:07 AM #10
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    this had good emotion, i felt it anyhow, good piece of work....keep it up

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  11. August 10th, 2005, 10:23 AM #11
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    thanx for da feedback.....ill check any of your om's so just check out mine......
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  12. August 10th, 2005, 10:40 AM #12
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    Well, your vocab was off, you had structure and flow, but your topic was pretty played out. I think to improve this piece, you could drop your gangster language with the "da" and what not, and put in the real words. It would make your piece look that much better. Good drop for a beginner, and keep elevating.

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  13. August 10th, 2005, 12:02 PM #13
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  14. August 10th, 2005, 12:42 PM #14
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