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  1. July 12th, 2005, 05:15 PM #1
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    Hallucination

    *I breath in & out quickly then think*

    I am Michael Jackson...
    I am the King of Pop...
    I am the artist of the millenium...

    I'm in a court house my history the issue, a hurtful past
    curious to know about my caved in nose or surgical mask
    night gaurds beat me & scared me with there bastard dog
    joked about how I picked my nose? answer: out of a catalog
    'Wacko Jacko?' pychiatrist report states my clout is crazy
    german fans make me throw fits or throw out my baby?
    no doubt I'm crazy? a media nightmare? or obscene fucker?
    lets get one fact straight though, Billy Jean is not my lover!
    a role-model kids look up to me, there starving for a messsage
    how many counts of molestation? pardon me for a second

    *breaths in & breaths out*

    I am Michael Jackson...
    I am the King of Pop...
    I am the artist of the millenium

    soft girlish tone, no hormone treatments but goons talk
    Im out of this world...Why else do you think I moonwalk?
    mother loved? she was too occupied being a Jahova witness
    dad disciplined well, beat me or he might unload the dishes
    had a concrete idea paved the way to a repeating ending
    of endless paparazzi inspired by a tabloid feeding frenzy
    proceeding empty no butterflies, spun till socks are twirled
    stoned to death, whispering at the victims. you rock my world?
    hehe

    "We the jury find the defendent Michael Jackson... Not guilty"

    *breaths out and thinks*

    I am Michael Jackson...
    I am the King of Pop...
    I am the artist of the millenium
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  2. July 12th, 2005, 05:15 PM #2
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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=208926

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  3. July 12th, 2005, 05:22 PM #3
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    I actually really liked this, it handled an original concept very well and, seeing as its Michael Jackson, very fairly...
    Otherwise, the flow was gud, the wordplay wasnt bad and the vocab was great, especially at the start... Chorus was gud also...
    The song's weakest point, althoguh it was gud, was the wordplay I justdidnt see enuff creativity on that part...Focus on metas/similies/multis...
    Gud Work, Keep Droppin...
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  4. July 12th, 2005, 05:33 PM #4
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    I read this over at Rm.. I thought that it was very creative and shit.. I feel that it could have been longer.. But overall I liked the concept..
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  5. July 12th, 2005, 07:09 PM #5
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    Dang, despite that it couldve been longer, this HAS to be one of the best concept pieces on here. Also I think that it could've been a better rhyme scheme, but other than that, creativity poured throughout and i enjoyed every second reading this. Good job.
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  6. July 12th, 2005, 10:26 PM #6
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    yea cool shit, I like what you did with this, shows creativity. enjoyed the read , your pretty good, keep dropping for sure.. and keep elevating. it mos def coulda been longer as others have already said but still short and sweet. good shit for sure
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  7. July 13th, 2005, 10:24 PM #7
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    thanks
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  8. July 13th, 2005, 11:49 PM #8
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    I like how this pieced together and everything was understandable but still flowed smooth, def feelin this shit
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  9. July 14th, 2005, 12:41 AM #9
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    I like the role playing
    nice rhyme shceme keep it up kid
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  10. July 14th, 2005, 04:45 AM #10
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    cool stuff
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  11. July 14th, 2005, 05:25 AM #11
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    damn...That was a nice read...flowd good...I really liked how it all stayed on topic and the words you used to put it all together.
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