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[Mantra]

Not much to say that hasn't already been said.
Very strong emotionally and message wise;
the anger was obviously apparent in your words.
I liked how you didn't bog it down too, and just
said what you were feeling instead of over complicating it
with complex wordplay, description, etc..
Like jek commented good venting piece

[Laureate]

do not freepost in PS please

[>Inertia>]

This was a very cool and solid piece, which i've come to expect from you. As others have said, it really had the feeling of an actual audio spoken word, and I can actually 'hear' it in my head. I feel as though you should actually record this as a spoken word piece. Generally, it was very solid. Great emotion throughout the piece, which is always one of your stronger points. Word choice was somewhat simplistic, but worked well in this particular piece. I was feeling the subject matter of this piece..very raw and emotional. Overall, there weren't any major flaws in this piece that I can point out. Very good job.