http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wN6gSyX2UKQ
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...831/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...615/index.html
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Think you need to up the volume n the emotion. Hook is actually not too bad after the second listen. But yeah I think your flow is pretty good, but work on your delivery.
Stay up.
i can't even hear it homie...crank it up some
umm...I know I'm probably reading too much into this...but, by saying, "I never knew a GIRL could take my breath away" suggests that something (or someone) other than a GIRL could...like...hmmm
just sayin...jus the minor nuances of lyricism
keep elevating
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Thankz for the feedback. lol an what i meant by a girl taking my breath away was finding that one girl that makes you wanting to stop talkin to the other ones. but i kno what u meant lol
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Where did mine go though… I hate when shit is locked up LOL