All I Know

Oncoming traffic looks like
Impending dread
Headlights
Brighter than Hell’s eyes
Watching
In brimstone shadow.

I’m just trying to get
Home
Magical place
I’ve struggled to find of late
Stumbling paths
Sometimes
Can’t help but laugh
The hiccups placed
In my way
By my favorite antagonist
Fate…

Would have it; so happens
Happenstance or predetermination
Has me damned.
Clawing
And scratching for an upper hand
Yet under the boot of it all
Befitting my fall
My pride decried
How humbleness calls
And damn it I answered!
Yet torment - relentless
Bending me; endlessly
It seems;
Time is a relative thing
I’m told.
How it took
An eternity to grow
To adulthood,
Now eternal strife is all I know.

I liked how you staggered your flow. At times the rhyming was obviously, at other times, it was more camouflaged and internal. Lots of half rhymes and slants. I like shit like that. As for your content. It’s kind of hard to gauge. However, my interpretation of this piece is that it’s about adulthood and how it basically sucks. It’s like fighting an uphill battle, except the hill is slippery and wet — it’s hard to gain traction. Hard to get ahead. It’s a daunting task. That never seems to end. Every day is groundhogs day. I’m not sure if that was your actual intention. But after reading it twice that’s what I took away from it.

“ By my favorite antagonist
Fate…”

“ And scratching for an upper hand
Yet under the boot of it all
Befitting my fall
My pride decried
How humbleness calls
And damn it I answered!”

Those were my two favorites parts.

Really good read. I enjoyed!

Nice!!!!

Thank you guys

Fuck outta here with your good shit