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@daveDILLY
@Lenox
yo jonny blaze ....lenox
Bro let’s not fight - bc im swingin punchs with all of my might..
shit will get violent on Jon like diarrhea @ a construction site
Predictions got him winning - Yall must be fuckin jokin??..
Cause to me blazing trouble, you know my PO don’t want me smoking
I’m not a big text head - When I was here the VBL was my forte..
If he’s got videos posted, his cloud was hacked & he’s doing something gay
Stick a fork in em' hes done - you no a dogs gotta eat, so best wishes..
your getting SERVED against me, makes sense Lenox is a website for dishes
Your punchs are 2 basic - & mine will get your face hit..
Soon as I make contact, lens going down. probably better off getting lasik
Lmfao..Quote:
Originally Posted by miracle
Ur home now.. I bet u still have dreams bout how they left ur asshole ripped n bleedin.
It’s funny how yall are both homesick, but for u it’s a whole different reason.
Pick apart this pussy one limb at a time. whole crew filled with monstas,
but if he survive..
Ima show up at his hospital to finish em off.. like how Israel did Gaza.
Dave was never hard in prison, that’s how I know them rhymes fake son,
If he ever got ‘tried in the showers’… his whole cell block was begging em to take one.
Heard u wrote to ya fat wifey daily, with no replies. Like, “babe I can’t wait to see you”,
Man, that bitch wouldn’t even read dilly bars for this…… until he brought her back DQ.
Plus I peeped ur past battles bro, ya career literally amounts to nothing,
… Cuz ur only known for choking belts & never being seen again.. — Dia’s cousin.
nice verse man
glad ya posted right away
lets get some votes in here. good luck
yo jonny blaze ....lenox
Bro let’s not fight - bc im swingin punchs with all of my might..
shit will get violent on Jon like diarrhea @ a construction site
this made me lol little basic
Predictions got him winning - Yall must be fuckin jokin??..
Cause to me blazing trouble, you know my PO don’t want me smoking
cool
I’m not a big text head - When I was here the VBL was my forte..
If he’s got videos posted, his cloud was hacked & he’s doing something gay
liked this
Stick a fork in em' hes done - you no a dogs gotta eat, so best wishes..
your getting SERVED against me, makes sense Lenox is a website for dishes
i've never seen the actual concept used, tho dagel mentioned it the other day i think it was just tooo wordy for me
Your punchs are 2 basic - & mine will get your face hit..
Soon as I make contact, lens going down. probably better off getting lasik
again didnt like the wording but cool concept. [/QUOTE]
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Ur home now.. I bet u still have dreams bout how they left ur asshole ripped n bleedin.
It’s funny how yall are both homesick, but for u it’s a whole different reason.
this was cool
Pick apart this pussy one limb at a time. whole crew filled with monstas,
but if he survive..
Ima show up at his hospital to finish em off.. like how Israel did Gaza.
didnt like this
Dave was never hard in prison, that’s how I know them rhymes fake son,
If he ever got ‘tried in the showers’… his whole cell block was begging em to take one.
thought this was going to be a gay joke, little soft hit
Heard u wrote to ya fat wifey daily, with no replies. Like, “babe I can’t wait to see you”,
Man, that bitch wouldn’t even read dilly bars for this…… until he brought her back DQ.
nope
Plus I peeped ur past battles bro, ya career literally amounts to nothing,
… Cuz ur only known for choking belts & never being seen again.. — Dia’s cousin.
current event, on first read i didnt like it, read it again thought it wa ok.
didnt think this was the greatest battle. i dont really remember dave being a text head. but this was an ok verse, i felt his concepts were there just a bit off, lenox, safe to say ur ghost writer didnt write this verse lol.. im playing.. uhm i thought the opener was your botb the gaza line i thought could have been done a bit better. the tried in the showers was pretty cool.. the dq i didnt like at all.. and the closer was okish... felt a little rushed gotta work at being consistent. not bad but not great.
Vote Lennox
just thought he was a bit more polished....and dave still has AOL so theres that...
Bro let’s not fight - bc im swingin punchs with all of my might..
shit will get violent on Jon like diarrhea @ a construction site
made me chuckle. diggin it
Predictions got him winning - Yall must be fuckin jokin??..
Cause to me blazing trouble, you know my PO don’t want me smoking
I woulda worded this "blaze in trouble". with that being said this wasnt super harsh. just saying blaze in trouble gives no imagery and is bland as is
I’m not a big text head - When I was here the VBL was my forte..
If he’s got videos posted, his cloud was hacked & he’s doing something gay
nah this is statementish
Stick a fork in em' hes done - you no a dogs gotta eat, so best wishes..
your getting SERVED against me, makes sense Lenox is a website for dishes
this is ok but served / dishes is a concept that was being used 20 years ago and it wasnt mind boggling back then
Your punchs are 2 basic - & mine will get your face hit..
Soon as I make contact, lens going down. probably better off getting lasik
I like the concept but feel it could have been worded better.
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Ur home now.. I bet u still have dreams bout how they left ur asshole ripped n bleedin.
It’s funny how yall are both homesick, but for u it’s a whole different reason.
this was harsh. diggin it
Pick apart this pussy one limb at a time. whole crew filled with monstas,
but if he survive..
Ima show up at his hospital to finish em off.. like how Israel did Gaza.
statementish
Dave was never hard in prison, that’s how I know them rhymes fake son,
If he ever got ‘tried in the showers’… his whole cell block was begging em to take one.
begging him to take a shower and tried in the showers arent congruent so this falls flat.
Heard u wrote to ya fat wifey daily, with no replies. Like, “babe I can’t wait to see you”,
Man, that bitch wouldn’t even read dilly bars for this…… until he brought her back DQ.
nah
Plus I peeped ur past battles bro, ya career literally amounts to nothing,
… Cuz ur only known for choking belts & never being seen again.. — Dia’s cousin.
wording is so bad
Close as fuck. Lenny had the opener which was good then completely fell off for the rest of his verse.
Dave's opener was his best bar but it wasn't up to par with lennys bar. dave had some outdated concepts and wording could use some tuning. For me this battle really comes down to the openers, and Lenny definitely had the harsher punch.
v/ Lenny
Lenox took this battle with better punches overall. Dave had some cool ideas, however they were all worded and executed poorly. Stick around, tho. You’ll catch the hang of how to form punches the more you do it and the more feed you get back. Take the criticism and actually apply it, don’t be like some of these fools who’ve been battling for 20 years and still suck at wording their concepts lol.
Lenox got it.
Bro let’s not fight - bc im swingin punchs with all of my might..
shit will get violent on Jon like diarrhea @ a construction site
funny
Predictions got him winning - Yall must be fuckin jokin??..
Cause to me blazing trouble, you know my PO don’t want me smoking
concept is cool, wording took some sting off it
I’m not a big text head - When I was here the VBL was my forte..
If he’s got videos posted, his cloud was hacked & he’s doing something gay
a bit statementish
Stick a fork in em' hes done - you no a dogs gotta eat, so best wishes..
your getting SERVED against me, makes sense Lenox is a website for dishes
this is soft, would prefer something more personal or closer to home
Your punchs are 2 basic - & mine will get your face hit..
Soon as I make contact, lens going down. probably better off getting lasik
concept is cool but not hard hitting, a bit statementish at the end. but not sure how I would reword it myself
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Ur home now.. I bet u still have dreams bout how they left ur asshole ripped n bleedin.
It’s funny how yall are both homesick, but for u it’s a whole different reason.
this is ok
Pick apart this pussy one limb at a time. whole crew filled with monstas,
but if he survive..
Ima show up at his hospital to finish em off.. like how Israel did Gaza.
nah.. this is too basic
Dave was never hard in prison, that’s how I know them rhymes fake son,
If he ever got ‘tried in the showers’… his whole cell block was begging em to take one.
not feeling this one
Heard u wrote to ya fat wifey daily, with no replies. Like, “babe I can’t wait to see you”,
Man, that bitch wouldn’t even read dilly bars for this…… until he brought her back DQ.
not sure what this means
Plus I peeped ur past battles bro, ya career literally amounts to nothing,
… Cuz ur only known for choking belts & never being seen again.. — Dia’s cousin.
ehh this is ok
I got dave here with the better concepts and more enjoyable read. no hate lenny but I didn't feel most of your verse unfortunately. showers, israel/gaza were both pretty basic, opener was good, the wifey line not sure whats going on there. and the chokin belts, these current events bars are gettin repetitive if I could read one verse without dia being mentioned I would be VERY grateful. Dave is shaking off the rust and needs to work on execution but had better concepts overall and a more enjoyable short read
thanks v/dave
DaveDilly
Bro let’s not fight - bc im swingin punchs with all of my might..
shit will get violent on Jon like diarrhea @ a construction site
lol ok
Predictions got him winning - Yall must be fuckin jokin??..
Cause to me blazing trouble, you know my PO don’t want me smoking
this was off
I’m not a big text head - When I was here the VBL was my forte..
If he’s got videos posted, his cloud was hacked & he’s doing something gay
lol
Stick a fork in em' hes done - you no a dogs gotta eat, so best wishes..
your getting SERVED against me, makes sense Lenox is a website for dishes
eh. not really feelings this one
Your punchs are 2 basic - & mine will get your face hit..
Soon as I make contact, lens going down. probably better off getting lasik
good concept but the double entendre is off because the second contact lens going down meaning doesn't really make sense. this could have been exceptional.
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Lenox
Ur home now.. I bet u still have dreams bout how they left ur asshole ripped n bleedin.
It’s funny how yall are both homesick, but for u it’s a whole different reason.
lmao
Pick apart this pussy one limb at a time. whole crew filled with monstas,
but if he survive..
Ima show up at his hospital to finish em off.. like how Israel did Gaza.
ouch. this was fucked up
Dave was never hard in prison, that’s how I know them rhymes fake son,
If he ever got ‘tried in the showers’… his whole cell block was begging em to take one.
naw not feeling this one
Heard u wrote to ya fat wifey daily, with no replies. Like, “babe I can’t wait to see you”,
Man, that bitch wouldn’t even read dilly bars for this…… until he brought her back DQ.
lol a bit basic tho
Plus I peeped ur past battles bro, ya career literally amounts to nothing,
… Cuz ur only known for choking belts & never being seen again.. — Dia’s cousin.
this was ok
I have lenox taking this one with a bit more consistency. Dave was close but his bars were a bit less to my liking. i felt his concepts were not fully realized at points. good battle gents
v/Lenox
4-1 need more votes
Vote Lenox for the more polished verse.. I’ve seen better from him but not bad..
dilly will get it down after a few battles.. Lenox opener was LOTB
Vote Lenox
Lenox wins by TKO