Originally Posted by
Karaoshi
If you knew the aches upon my soul,
The rust of bones I feebly hold,
The deepened grudges borne within
The sinews stretched beneath my skin,
You would be less so quick to scold.
I like this, a lot actually. Real solid starting line there to draw us in. Everyone's got aches, so we can recognize pain in other people. But, you're drawing attention to it. I get this idea of judgment that people throw upon strangers without knowing them. See so many people say "that dude is scum" or whatever because they did a certain crime but in truth... we don't know these people. We wouldn't be so quick to judge addicts and others if we knew the scars they bore.
If you've felt ill fortune's glances,
Had devil's luck, known dusted chances,
Felt your fierceness slowly lost
In the fight, and in the cost,
You will have your hard-sought answers.
Answers is a curious ending there. What were the questions? I suppose those questions might be... why did this person do that? Why is this person like that? They'd have their answer if they faced anything measuring the hardship that the speaker has. Well phrased.
If you know a thing at all
Of the spinning coin or tumbling ball,
Of praying will upon the dice -
This God of empty sacrifice! -
Judge not the end, but how I fall.
Like the play with 'chance' represented by a spinning coin. And dice. Chances so far have not been in favor of the speaker. Don't judge a person by what their finish is like, but rather how it happened and what they were dealing with in that time. A person is more than a moment's terrible mistake.