Sacred Scriptures Week 03
28. Robb. vs. 29. Gabriel
Verses due: Monday, March 26th 2007.
Voting ends: Friday, March 30th 2007.
Please vote on 3 battles.
Goodluck
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Sacred Scriptures Week 03
28. Robb. vs. 29. Gabriel
Verses due: Monday, March 26th 2007.
Voting ends: Friday, March 30th 2007.
Please vote on 3 battles.
Goodluck
blood sweat and tears
Think Twice.
When he walked out of my life I cried.
Did I feel something inside?
But…its not right. He’s a minor.
A blur; won’t he prefer his own
Observer him alone then refer a clone?
Voyeurism isn’t flattering so...
Does he want a provider? Pride?
Why should I be deprived a right?
I taught him happiness, liberty
Desire to be seen as his enemy?
Desire?
Sorry. Yea judge this as a stand alone piece but its actually a part 2 to something I wrote a long time ago. It might make more sense if you read. Apologies to all for having such little to show but rust is rust and im on par with the titanic right now.I realize now the old piece was from before some of you where born, LOL.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...7.html?t=82007
Lady, his blood isn't on my hands. Fuck him and fuck you,
i understand murders wrong, but i got fucked by America too.
Robb, ur a spoiled american. A lazy christian rat,
your home prospers with jobs and riches, mine is under attack.
Get back, cut the bull. You think you're not to blame?
friends of mine died in them buildings... in your religion's name.
Nigger shut your black ass up. You americans always bitchin,
Im from Iraq, Al-Quida bombed you, they have no political affliction.
Nigger? Whoa bitch, stay your dusty ass in your place,
4 I knock your man out your arms, and, pull that scarf from ur face.
you're blaming all americans. Its not us who are doing it,
its rich politicians, and stupid foriegners like u who ruin it.
Im not stupid. Im not foriegn. Im an american citizen,
a democrat, with minority interests, but you're a fuckin idiot.
minority interests? like what u muslim whore?
buying up cheap buildings in the hood... to turn to liquor stores?
then make money and dip? you people are a trip.
there's no limit, to how evil you arab folks can get.
you can't budge me with a grudge. Who are you to judge?
at least my people don't make their living, killing each other with drugs.
your race on the other hand, symbolizes america to the fullest,
if you don't have it you don't earn it, you steal it by killing with.. bullets.
how can you say that? you're a disgrace, plus you come from a race,
where your men make you wear vails, to cover the beauty of your face?
your families get neglected. Your holy land is split in segments,
and you'll die if you get pregnant, cause you're gender isn't respected!
women are respected, we're regarded as divine, but i find it disturbin,
that you have issues with us saving ourselves, to remain virgins.
our familys fight wars every day, our holy land was given away,
we fight for independance day, so fuck what you christians say.
you insist to command us, but resist to understand us,
that in bliss you demand us, to be content with the status.
hold a dead man in my hands, who's blood sheds our gods names,
both of which preach salvation, your soilders killed him in vein.
its not my faught he was slain.
WELL HE'S dead, and those who killed him, don't even know his name!
they continue to blame, our islamic way of life,
as an excuse for air raids, and civilian attacks at night.
those people who hurt your country? are an extremist sect,
who commit extreme acts to intervene and demand respect.
you're american. the country's mostly christian. yes I understand.
but i portrayed to my country, that u all are members of the ku klux klan?
on channels, burning crosses, hanging black men from trees,
yes ladies and gentlemen of the audiance, this is what americans believe.
what if u were holding a young woman? and emotions just ate you?
being supplied guns and lies, by the guys of allies who just hate you?
that's not a fair comparison. Ku Klux Klan members aint christian?
they're just a deviant cult, on a racist genocide mission.
we'll we feel the same way. Islamic terrorists don't represent me.
but most americans feel the way you do... cause this is all they see.
I never thought about it like that. I see why you take offense,
yes, Robb. Look at if from our side... and things will make sense.
I just want you to know, that you should stop now with the type shit,
quit grouping us as terrorists, we all aren't like this.
well don't look at blacks as thugs. We all don't sell drugs,
some of us go to church and act a fool... while showing god love.
the funny thing? us arguing like this? this is what they want,
on some divide and conqur shit, right here is the war front.
while we argue and bitch,
our governments conspire and snitch,
pit minorities against each other, while we kill and they get rich.
lay your friend down. lets shake hands. Please forgive me for my actions,
and lets go to war, against the evil, that causes things like this to happen.
agreed.
um.....DQ ^ 68 lines? the rules say 60
Good lookin Baron, but its all good. I don't give a shit. I'll take the DQ. I couldn't find the line limit when i was skimming the rules. I'll take the DQ and just sign me out, till i have more time. thanks both of u all.Quote:
Originally Posted by Baron P. Mortuus
no DQ.
Up over closed.
Wow, Robb...
That was tight...I mean...your flow and vocan coulda been better...
But the content was really fuckin nice.
I dunno who you are, so I'm very surprised to read such a deep verse.
Long, yes...but honestly, it kept my interest the whole way.
Actually made me wish it was longer...kudos to that.
Gab...I dunno...your shit was nice...but it tied in with that collab...
Just doesn't stand on it's own that much...
But I enjoyed the viewpoint...like how you made that chick regret and have second thoughts.
But for this battle...it's vote: Robb.
Gabe, shaking the rust off, I still liked your piece. Very emotionally in touch...I thought it was interesting how your speaker was trying to speculate what the motivations of the other person were. I'd like to read the previous piece.
Robb-technically, this piece was only okay, but content wise, it was really well executed. You outline basic stereotypes for to groups of people, explain their sources and explain why they're bullshit. Fuck commerce, good job! I especially liked the use of the KKK to describe the way Americans see Middle Eastern people.
Vote-Robb, just because he gave so much more to enjoy and work with.
v/Robb
Gabriel, you're obviously shaking the rust off, but I think you could've written more lines writer's block or not. On the other hand, Robb, I wasn't overly impressed with your verse either, probably because you used so many cuss words, which I'm particularly in favor of. In fact, I don't use them at all in pieces because I feel it takes away from the content. You could've differentiated what was going on though because it was very confusing.
Robb. wins
Gabriel loses