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Essence
ayo......
i reach back to the essence,as a lil man i stood
naw i'm full grown, still tryin to make it out the hood
don't wanna be a statistic,everything is balistic
it seems likes everyday other day anotha nigga missin
gun shots,bodies droppin every second
neva knew that i would hear news about my cuz gettin blasted
true story fam, he was 25 two kids and a crazy bitch
broke up wit her, thought whole life would switch
but it didn't, couple of days he turned up missin
trail of blood in the kitchen,lead to the closet where his body sittin
Gorey feelin, yea he took one to the head
the family shook up when we hurd he was dead
it just happened so fast
an just the other day i seen him at the park showin off his ass
spinnin wheels on his motorcycle
brite sunny day everything coo,plus his son wanna be like him
now i gotta take life seriously
read the definiton of "Essence",and report if u feelin me
tight grasp,sorta like a heat flash
venture back into time when i couldn't speak or walk that fast
i love life,thats why i charish every minute
cause this essence of the passion, is the thing that keeps me in it
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...71#post3598771
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...83#post3598783
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i was feelin that piece man, the whole introduction into ya cuz' life. Was deep n meaningful, i liked the use of words as well and the multis in here was tight too. The "essence" line really caught my attention, would have been the best line. Was a great drop and the emotion was felt throught out the piece from start to finish. Keep it up mayn
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Nice drop homie could feel u on dis shit. ur flow was nice even though i got mixed up a little at the beginnig dere. im youn i dont really know the definition of the word essence but i could see were u were comin from in this piece and the how u keepin it reel nice drop. structure was normal that means it was nice. u had a litttle vocab but not alot. overal a pretty nice piece it wasnt super duper incredible but nice.
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Good flow, decent vocab. Not feelin the topic though, seems kinda generic, ive seen like 100 OMs like this. Good job though, it didnt get boring and was pretty good for a played topic.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=256133
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Definition of Essence is the basic,real,and invariable nature of a thing
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shit was tight dog. one the realist shit on here. up your vocab though, you got sometin fly goin on if you get a lil more versitile wit your diction, youd rock shit on another level. keep on, 1.
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Nice flow, Meh vocab. The Topic Was Kinda Victoria Secret, seems kinda Newbie,Nice job though, it didnt get boring and was pretty good for a played topic.
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I felt you on this one, deep topic. Structure was good and the use of metaphors was tight. Lil more vocab, and you'll do some serious damage.~1~
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thanx for the feed.....uppin for more
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a jhonny srry for free postin but could u drop some feed on my shit thats open rite now please. i let out my self and no1s really leaven good feed